(Applicant's Address)
15/09/2012
Nestlé Singapore (Pte) Ltd.
15A, Changi Business Park Central 1
#05-02/03 Eightrium@Changi Business Park
Singapore 486035
Dear Sir/Madam
Application for Internship in Nestle Research Centre
I am currently a second year undergraduate, writing in to seek for a placement as an intern under your prestigious company. As a Food Science and Technology (FST) undergraduate in National University of Singapore, I have always been interested in doing research, especially in the field of food sensory. Nestle Research Centre is well known and which many highly speak of. I feel that Nestle Research Centre’s working culture will be able to provide me with the opportunity to maximise my skills. It is my personal belief that teamwork and enthusiasm are fundamental for success. I am confident that my leadership experience and passion for the food industry will be able to value-add to your company’s research.
After a year of experience as an executive committee member of NUS FST Society, I was appointed as the President, thereby entrusted with the responsibility of leading the committee in several upcoming projects. During the course of the projects, I demonstrated excellent resource and manpower management skills by delegating the work fairly among the committee based on their experience and expertise. I believe this leadership experience serves as a stepping stone for me to work amicably with the research team of your company.
On top of that, I constantly seek to better myself in other directions, and one key area of development is in terms of work experience. There are many valuable skills to be picked up through working with others, especially out in the industry. Before school term, I have worked as a temporary staff in TUV SUD PSB Food Laboratory, with the aim of exposing myself in the food (or food & beverage) industry and to better understand the needs of these companies.
I am enthusiastic and looking forward to be part of your company as an intern in the Nestle Research Centre. In review of your company’s working culture and promising opportunities, I feel that my leadership skills and passion to research and taking up of challenges will be an asset to the company. Along with this is my detailed resume for your reference. I can be reached with confidence at 81805538 or you can email me at jasminee-@hotmail.com. I look forward to hearing from you to arrange for a meet up on possible opportunities. Thank you for your time and consideration.
Yours faithfully
Jasmine Toh
Hi Jasmine,
ReplyDeleteFirstly I'd like to say that if you want to apply to Nestle, we have a classmate that have actually done an internship there!! It is May-Ee and you can go look for her for contacts if you wish (:
Okay let's get down to your application letter..
I really like your tone and your enthusiasm about FST that you expressed in your letter. The passion really shows true in your words.
However, there are still some things you can do to improve your letter!
In your 2nd paragraph, you have done well to show your leadership skills. however I would have liked to see more about your leadership experience. perhaps start with an example of an event that you have done. Elaborate on how that shows your leadership skills, you can use words like "delegate, managed, coordinated, collaborated". And you can also add on what was the results of your project/event. Was it successful? Did many people attend that event? Did you achieve what your goals were for that event. Things like that. Also, did you receive praise from your teacher-in-charge or peers? I feel that through examples and words like these will show through as leadership qualities that would make your application letter truly stand out!
Also, I would have loved to also see some elaboration in your example of your work experience in the next paragraph. What exactly did you learn? Were you trained in anything job-specific? A lab skill that was picked up that could be applied to Nestle? Also, what was the feedback from your employers?
When stating examples perhaps you can use the rule of having firstly state your competency, followed by the example and finally your result. So in other words, competency referring to your job skill (teamwork, leadership etc). Example could refer to a specific event/incident/job that have showcased it. Describe in detail what you did and how you did it. Who you did it with and where as well. lastly, end with a result that shows your accomplishment. Having positive feedback from your supervisor or having stats/data that show a upward trend or improvements.
Lastly, I would personally prefer to have a "professional" email set up that would have my full name or my initials when putting it in an application letter. Somehow, I feel that that would portray a more professional image. And perhaps a clear separation between work and leisure.
I hope my comments have been useful!!
Cheers and see you tomorrow!